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    dots Submission Name: Gone dots
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    Author: mekisha4ever
    ASL Info:    39yespleaseNV.
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 38/36/47
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsGone dots
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    With all I have gone through you would think
    that I know how to take a blow

    I just keep going on and on with my fight
    with no end in sight

    Really I wish that my heart didn't long so much for you now that your gone

    I just can't seem to pick up and move on with my life

    I have more time to myself but it just makes me lonely

    Because your gone my life seams so dull with no one to call

    I know you didn't want me to care, I do and have
    from the very first night

    Why do you always have to be gone can't you get back to me some how

    Just try to see it my way before I'm GONE






    Submitted on 2007-11-21 16:26:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very sad ,another good one, it really sums up lonliness
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. It sounds like words that were once spoken to me by a girl I once held dear. She loved me so much yet I left her for someone that I loved more.

    Jeez, collectively as poets we need to come up with material that brings about happy memories.
    | Posted on 2007-11-22 00:00:00 | by red_summer | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a longing feel to it and I think we all have there once in their life? Anyway great write!

    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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