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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    28
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 69/87/51
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDefinitionsdots
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    Drift sleep die awaken,
    believe intriged debated foresaken,
    The definitions have no point,
    numbed down to the joints.

    Slow your nervous systym down,
    king of nothing,pawned his crown,
    give in to your primal needs,
    pollute your mind and soul with speed.

    Loving killing resting paternity,
    guilt hate resolution eternity,
    the stories are all the same,
    in the end we are all to blame.

    So point your finger at yourself,
    give the poor all your wealth,
    blame ashamed resentment guilt,
    the way that it was has been rebuilt.

    Peace love sex and war,
    stoners gangsters vrgins and whores,
    march with the saints and march with the sinners
    dance with the losers and dance with the winners.





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      "Peace love sex and war,
    stoners gangsters vrgins and whores,
    march with the saints and march with the sinners
    dance with the losers and dance with the winners."

    That is one of those things I see and think, "I wish I wrote that." You know?

    I love how the words you threw into the beginnings of the first, third, and fifth stanzas (and the middle of the fourth) all manage to go together and fit into this perfectly. I didn't catch that at first. Some kind of punctuation between them may make it easier to read though.
    But do you mean the definitions of THOSE words have no points, or just all words in general? To me, it could go either way.

    (Normally, I wouldn't have so many questions, but my mind is completely off today.)

    And there's something I really like about "king of nothing, pawned his crown." I've never heard that before. ...Clever.

    So once again... good stuff. You have a ridiculous amount of talent, and I love the way you use it.


    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      you are an amazing writter, it flows so incredible well!
    | Posted on 2007-11-22 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]


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