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    dots Submission Name: Nostalgia. [unfinished]dots

    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i dont think im finished...
    this is how ive been feeling.

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    dotsNostalgia. [unfinished]dots

    Merged emotions battle for a definite answer
    The one I've been looking for this whole time
    They've got me screaming for a feather in a haystack
    While my head says to go for it
    My heart says to leave it alone
    And while the two argue, my conscience seems to agree
    That in this life we play hard ball, winner take all
    Maybe there isn't a belonging place for me

    I've left my inferno, eager for something prominent
    Something that would abolish the hurt of yesterday
    And give me something to wake up to everyday
    I'm saving all my strength for that day
    Faultfinding demon, you'll never be satisfied

    Submitted on 2007-11-21 22:50:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'm glad you've finally got a piece started! and you've definitely got a good start on this one.. your vocabulary has gotten a lot better and makes your emotions so much stronger. the second stanza is very clear and full of raw emotion. the first stanza is as well, but i think you need to add a previous stanza that briefly covers the 'answer' you're trying to find. that is a great stanza if you add more about previous feelings and hardships. it would make the entire piece much more clear.
    love you! <3
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]

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