Description: This seems like a decent song when I sing it to myself with the tune that Im sure you can't hear through the words, but maybe the lyrics speak on their own.
memento mori -------------------------------------------
The leaves fall off when their colored most beautiful
Something you should think of 'fore you get to your funeral.
Don't be the character who never sees it coming.
Prepare for your death, but dont get caught running.
From it
Cuz it's
Useless to attempt escape.
love it
hug it
Accept your death 'for its too late
I think the reason for suicide
is simple ego
We can't accept that we can't control
the way that we go
I find myself wishing ev'ry day
to do it over
And find some way to end story lines
with decent closure.
But this doesnt mean that
theres no-thing left
Cuz death makes life the more beautiful
believe that.
And I'll try to remember that
we all must die
But that just means I'll work harder to give you
reason to cry
i spy some minor grammar errors, but then again, it doesn't matter when it's sung.
i think these are hell of a lot better lyrics than most posted here. i read this because of the title. memento mori: remember your mortality. have you ever played the game passage? if you want, you should play it and then read the creator's notes. it has the same message. http://hcsoftware.sourceforge.net/passage/index.html
anyway.
i like
"I think the reason for suicide
is simple ego"
that's a new way to look at it.
i'd change
"Accept your death 'for its too late"
i know the 'fore is for rhythm purposes, but i can see it being potentially confusing.
also, like the previous comments, i think it'd be a good idea to add a chorus. maybe just at the end. i think
"Prepare for your death, but dont get caught running.
From it
Cuz it's
Useless to attempt escape.
love it
hug it
Accept your death 'for its too late"
is a good choice to repeat one more time.
this also reminds me of "do you realize?" by the flaming lips. part of the song goes:
"do you realize
that everyone you know
someday
will die?
and instead of saying all of your goodbyes
let them know you realize
that life goes fast
it's hard to make the good things last"
ya know, this was a little unorthodox in its style but i really like it. the only thing i think i would change/add is a chorus. not necessarily the exact same thing repetitively, but some constant phrase or line or something that you bring back in every once in a while. that (i think) is an important part in what makes a song. altogether, i absolutely love this piece. thanks for the read!
peace.
~Shadia
hmm. well the subject isn't my favorite but if its your genre it works. I can see it as a song but it has no repitition like most songs do. good job all in all.
Submission Name: memento mori
