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    dots Submission Name: memento moridots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       This seems like a decent song when I sing it to myself with the tune that Im sure you can't hear through the words, but maybe the lyrics speak on their own.


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    dotsmemento moridots
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    The leaves fall off when their colored most beautiful
    Something you should think of 'fore you get to your funeral.
    Don't be the character who never sees it coming.
    Prepare for your death, but dont get caught running.

    From it
    Cuz it's
    Useless to attempt escape.
    love it
    hug it
    Accept your death 'for its too late

    I think the reason for suicide
    is simple ego
    We can't accept that we can't control
    the way that we go
    I find myself wishing ev'ry day
    to do it over
    And find some way to end story lines
    with decent closure.

    But this doesnt mean that
    theres no-thing left
    Cuz death makes life the more beautiful
    believe that.

    And I'll try to remember that
    we all must die
    But that just means I'll work harder to give you
    reason to cry

    For me.





    Submitted on 2007-11-21 23:17:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i spy some minor grammar errors, but then again, it doesn't matter when it's sung.
    i think these are hell of a lot better lyrics than most posted here. i read this because of the title. memento mori: remember your mortality. have you ever played the game passage? if you want, you should play it and then read the creator's notes. it has the same message. http://hcsoftware.sourceforge.net/passage/index.html

    anyway.
    i like
    "I think the reason for suicide
    is simple ego"
    that's a new way to look at it.

    i'd change
    "Accept your death 'for its too late"
    i know the 'fore is for rhythm purposes, but i can see it being potentially confusing.

    also, like the previous comments, i think it'd be a good idea to add a chorus. maybe just at the end. i think
    "Prepare for your death, but dont get caught running.

    From it
    Cuz it's
    Useless to attempt escape.
    love it
    hug it
    Accept your death 'for its too late"
    is a good choice to repeat one more time.

    this also reminds me of "do you realize?" by the flaming lips. part of the song goes:
    "do you realize
    that everyone you know
    someday
    will die?
    and instead of saying all of your goodbyes
    let them know you realize
    that life goes fast
    it's hard to make the good things last"
    | Posted on 2008-02-24 00:00:00 | by explosions | [ Reply to This ]
      ya know, this was a little unorthodox in its style but i really like it. the only thing i think i would change/add is a chorus. not necessarily the exact same thing repetitively, but some constant phrase or line or something that you bring back in every once in a while. that (i think) is an important part in what makes a song. altogether, i absolutely love this piece. thanks for the read!
    peace.
    ~Shadia
    | Posted on 2007-12-14 00:00:00 | by Shadia Dark | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. well the subject isn't my favorite but if its your genre it works. I can see it as a song but it has no repitition like most songs do. good job all in all.
    | Posted on 2007-11-23 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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