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    dots Submission Name: Writing contest--Pop Culturedots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 579
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsWriting contest--Pop Culturedots
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    POP CULTURE

    I purchased a carry on
    as I fly first class to just carry on
    leaving the destitute of thug kids
    And there “I’m so scary songs”
    Barely strong, till you listen to a holy psalm?
    I’m repugnant to live and love this…
    as I reach my arrival to a destination..
    Ironic, this time I wish I lost my luggage

    The ‘dark circles’ of pop culture lay siege to my expression
    my eyes glazed, attuned to commercialisms heed of my attention
    From the seeds of an erection
    to the linguistics of speech, theirs no perfection
    the slang of southern Tang
    white boys to praise
    from cultural routes to false claims
    by our brethrens,
    popped pills to prick cops
    style in stocks filled for what’s real, pop kills our hip hop
    Photo finish with a still shot
    the end of days, in a way we’ve diminished how we feel shocked
    Peace and green trees, the bottom of the barrel,
    Starbucks is the new cup of tea for our peril
    No longer sterile
    The end of our coat tails,
    plunged in sullen trails of our broke jails
    eloped males, to coke sales,
    its all in perspective if our hopes failed
    there’s the factors of the actors, chocolate dipped crackers,
    impetuous rappers, Europe to pick new pastors,
    pedophiles tempestuous winds to whirl faster
    son to Mother nature, what to do in this world??
    I wish I could ask her


    I purchased a carry on
    as I fly first class to just carry on
    leaving the destitute of thug kids
    And there “I’m so scary songs”
    Barely strong, till you listen to a holy psalm?
    I’m repugnant to live and love this…
    as I reach my arrival to a destination..
    Ironic, this time I wish I lost my luggage

    From all the known people, love and the grown evil
    I see were all equal, like the lumber from Lowes to Home Depot
    broke and repo’d, unpaid debts leads to weak souls
    GDP to reach its apex, but I still speak ‘gross’
    Government mosquito ‘s, to eat most
    corporate America with a 30 min break
    no significant stakes,
    just coupons for Quiznos Mesquite toast
    I’m derisive to the lifeless,
    life is Hollywood with the right script
    the roots of ya morals you might trip
    Ice cube—are we done yet? Just like this…
    shoes you wont scuff, tip toed reality you wont bluff
    you just hold up, opinions that you Dredd, but ya don’t judge
    who? He’s you, we should just own up,
    fame, fortune, and fire power were all blown up
    I’ll be old till my hope is gone,
    the fountain of youth, couldn’t fill a moat or pond,
    the world to go for broke and bomb,
    the hopeless pawns,
    dudes to females with a pedicure,
    CEO’s look good to step on us, their secular
    like their souls is gone
    but they cant control this song, or the inferno of the temperature
    I just hope you feel the heat like your coat is on




    Submitted on 2007-11-21 23:41:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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