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    dots Submission Name: I love youdots

    Author: bluecrane
    ASL Info:    19/F/WASHINGTON
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 70/83/26
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 737
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       for the longest time I've had my eyes on someone that I never thought anything could happen with. He's in the military and when we first started out we didn't know how it would all work. Now i'm marrying him, and i couldn't be happier. This is a poem that I was working on for a year before we finally got together.

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    dotsI love youdots

    There you are, standing there

    You don't know my name

    You're the one I'm dreaming of

    Yet empty days replay

    You're the one to keep me warm

    But you don't see my face

    No hands to hold

    No one so bold

    To speak for anything

    You hold my heart so dearly

    With the grasp of your strong hands

    I've dreamed of you, for love be true

    A love almost seen be-damned

    Your heart is mine

    As mine is your's

    In a realm no one can see

    A love so pure, so strong, so true

    With a lingering, obnoxious melody

    For a moment, time stands still

    Life flashes right before me

    When I come to, I can't find you

    But then you're right behind me

    Submitted on 2007-11-23 02:40:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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