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    dots Submission Name: Into The Bingedots
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    Author: enigmaticone
    ASL Info:    22/m/nh
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 16/36/23
    Words: 291
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 157
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1774



    Description:
       Despite the way this is written, it is about my time of binging. I wrote from my best friends perspective. I also gave it a rhyming element just to try something different. It is a very serious poem but the couple satirical lines and wording isnt really to be funny, but more just the way the relationship is between me and my friend.


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    dotsInto The Bingedots
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    Hellfires burn inside our hearts
    That is when the binging starts
    Just another way to ease the pain
    Another way to dodge the rain
    That falls so hard inside your head
    Remembering all the things they said
    A little vodka, a lot of rum
    Need some more you've just begun
    Pictures fade and fizzle out
    Then so starts your inner bout
    To fight yourself is not so grand
    When your too drunk to even stand
    You curse us all, your best of friends
    We just hope this binge will end
    Hope you become that man you were
    Not the guy who has the perma-slur
    You smell of booze, you reek of stink
    I wonder what your parents think
    I know they tried there very best
    But you turned out just like the rest
    A bitter man who's always drunk
    Aboard a sinking ship thats sunk
    There is still one thing you have to know
    You are our friend, we will never go
    We will always stand right here
    Until you life is in the clear
    We always do our best to help
    But you must find solace in yourself
    To deal with the pain a different way
    Would make tomorrow a brighter day
    So now your passed out on the floor
    I wish I had said these words before
    Your a good guy who finishes last
    Just because of your bad past
    But please dont fret and please dont cry
    Because you left that world behind
    Now awake my friend, the mornings here
    Erase your dreams that are full of fear
    You grab the bottle, dont even think
    And pour yourself a quick little drink
    I'll hold your hand until this has passed
    Until you dont need whats in that glass




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      I used to drink on a daily basis. It was a phase for me. Something I just fell into gradually over time. It was easy to sneak it. Eventually several years my parents did find out. Teachers and friends found out too and I was sent to a therapist, a doctor, a childhood alcoholic expert, a school nurse who was a 7-year sober alcoholic, a drug counselor, a psychiatrist - YAY Prozac, that was fun ... all the other antidepressants were awful - didn't make me less depressed or withdrawn ... Anyways, about a decade and a couple years and I don't drink daily anymore or take meds or see anyone for being [censored]ed up. I just had to change my life so I was in charge of it, be happy in my living situation by working so make stability there. I think people become alcholics, addicts, whatever 'cause something major is missing from their lives - something vital that's needed to keep you going- or want to keep going - so that you can send the message to your brain that you're actually worthwhile, your life isn't a total sham and you're not worthless and pointless...

    Blah, blah, blah ... good poem.

    Take care.

    :)
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by ssssss | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was written very well
    I too have had alcoholics as Friends and even as Family members so I know of this painful feeling you feel
    My advice is to maybe check out a group called Al Anon
    It is a group for Friends or relatives of someone who is an Alcoholic
    It really is quite a good organization
    I too am a former addic but it wasnt alcohol
    I am now 2+ years sober
    THANKS BE TO GOD
    Its not easy being a Friend to someone like this so it is a SDtrong credit to your character that you are such a Good Friend that does truly care
    How I wish I had Friends like you when I was going through my addiction
    Remain Strong and Keep Writing
    Writing Helps One Heal
    I will be Praying for You and Your Friend
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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