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    dots Submission Name: Moments Alone With a Laptopdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Misc
    Total Views: 847
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1070



    Description:
       Quotes from watching television all day. This is what break does to your mind...I swear.


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    dotsMoments Alone With a Laptopdots
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    - It's hard, it sucks, and people are laughing at you. You're strong, but not strong enough. I know how you feel.

    - Second best is never great enough. No one will ever remember you if you're second. Second's just another loser.

    - Sure, we get better, or at least we think we do.

    - Play pretend for another second, another moment. It makes it easier.

    - Who would have thought that one secret could cause so much havoc. Something so small, something that seems so large.

    - We can't be like each other, so we're all be different, and that way, we'll all be the same.

    - And the only thought that goes through her mind is, "What now?"

    - Where is he now? No where, no where...

    - A little bit dirty, and little bit clean, we're such a contradiction to ourselves.

    - Let's go back, back to the way it was before. No, no, I lied. Let's not. Really, I like it like this so much better.




    Submitted on 2007-11-23 17:13:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW !!
    The 2nd , the 6rd and the last ones are what I liked te most !!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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