So long it has been since last I gazed upon eternity
A love held deep in my heart but not my arms
Connections the mind chooses to push aside
The passion inhibited by fear of rejection
And replaced by unbearable longing
It pains me to lay my eyes upon you at times
Left dreaming of worlds that may never be
Awaiting the next day we meet again
That last embrace held a bit too long
And I wonder if you could ever feel the same
Perfection is in the eye of the beholder
I believe you fit it well despite your own thoughts
Talented, intelligent, and loyal to a fault
Never could I accurately describe all the reasons I adore you
And I wish so adamantly to show you
Curious as to if you are even aware
A relentless feeling that dwells with me even in sleep
The spark in my chest when thoughts of you arise
It seems as though I have held this endearment for you forever
And it slowly tears at my soul with the passing seasons
This love is a secret I alone shall bear
Until body betrays the mind, I keep distance
Holding inside the sorrow of never knowing
Why I was given this curse, or perhaps this gift
May forever remain a mystery
The voice of the poet seems focused despite the nature of your topic and it seems to possess this hungering need to simply be beautiful; never mind the high-school-ish reservations of being cool and collected in the face of a big slap from life itself. And I think that a lot of people will appreciate that trait not simply for its courage but for its construction.
The thing about this piece is that, while it comes toward its readers like another disgruntled teen, it sets itself apart by knowing exactly what's going on and not just dwelling on the fact that his/her insides hurt.
I guess that makes you one of the "cool kids."
I'll honk my horns for you as soon as I get my car back.
Very nicely done expression. Not a thing to find any fault with idea wise, just a good read of young adult thoughts done in a somewhat more mature, realistic fashion rather than seeming at all confused with what's going on.
If you would appreciate some minor suggestions from another writer as to some issues of wording or style let me know, but this is very nice as is. I have to run just now.
Submission Name: Obscure Allure
