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    dots Submission Name: The "ing"dots

    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Misc/Me
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 168

       This is pretty simple and not very good, but I wanted to put it up here anyway.....

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe "ing"dots

    Skin yearning,
    blood burning,
    eyes seeking,
    soul fleeing,
    never seeing,
    hollow being,
    always fearing,
    the true meaning.

    Submitted on 2007-11-24 04:07:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      feels good to comment again on your stuff.
    i won't lie, you said it yourself, this isn't all too good. but with a little more lines and your natural talent of keeping things simple it could be WAY better.
    not disin on you, just tellin what i think.
    | Posted on 2008-10-23 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      Fear bearing,
    soul tearing,
    heart beating,
    affection fleeting,

    It always the oppinon of one that a good poem can never be good enough.

    I like your poems simplicity. As a young aspiring artist i can respect your desire to strive for perfection.

    It truely is refreshing, perfection cannot be obtained with a days effort.

    Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
      It was not bad at all girl. Never worry what other people might think. Trust your gut, it's never wrong.
    I liked this plain and simple.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-12-15 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the "ing" thing! I'm glad you posted and it's just therapeutic to put out the feelings - no matter what!

    Fear not girl! The Universe has got your back & got ya covered!

    Rock on the Holidays!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. "the 'ing'" is sort of an ironic title, as "ing" signifies action and the conclusion of this poem:

    always fearing,
    the true meaning

    suggests no movement at all, because there is nowhere to move in the first place, as if we are fearing the true meaning, even though the "skin yearns and the blood burns." good job! very effective.
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by Myopic | [ Reply to This ]

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