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    dots Submission Name: Namelessdots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 89/90/40
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNamelessdots
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    Tethered to a numbed existance, wither away
    Dwell upon the regret that there's nothing to say
    Know that this is no white sorrow that all shall feel

    A masquerade of stability is performed
    As struggles and demons will destroy the form
    Know that this facade of strength is not even real

    Fog obscures the roads that were easily taken
    Leaving a cold body begging to awaken
    Know that we are stuck in this world of dying fields

    Pride seeps away like an open bleeding wound
    Digging a trench of routines to be a tomb
    Know that before our sins is where we kneel




    Submitted on 2007-11-24 13:25:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as safire says, you have a great vocabulary. It's a nice write, portaying lief's grey areas. I quite not get the soul of this write but all in all, the imagery kind of justified meaningfully.
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm..You have a very great vocabulary I must say. -Which is awesome ;P

    I dont quite understand this poem..But I do sort of. I get at the end,that we kneel before our sin.I think right before that you are saying we are just doing the same routines over and over?
    Lol, sorry >.<
    Its been a long day, but I dont thing id understand it much better earlier in the day either..
    I think this has potential,and you are a great writer..Maybe you could try to make the topic stand out more or put what its about in the descriptions?

    Just ideas
    -Safire(Shadow Doll)
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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