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    dots Submission Name: Pilgrimsdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 655
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       For my brother.


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    dotsPilgrimsdots
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    We wrap up in black coats
    and walk out into the black night,
    lips in our fists and shuffling feet,
    together we stride at that woebegone pace.
    We head down the dark street,
    our childhood calling us back to
    these still unfamiliar sidewalks,
    unlit houses now quiet and cold.
    We are the first we tell,
    with our hearts on our sleeves,
    our mouths willing words into physical form.
    We move through our own clouds
    of silence, and breath, and discovery.
    When the world pulls back the blanket
    we bare our souls to the frozen air
    and stand shivering in the new truth.




    Submitted on 2007-11-25 02:11:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Those last two lines gave me a shiver, myself. This is very expressive poetry. I don't hear the word "woebegone" very often in life, so it's pleasant to see it written down here among the rest of your beautiful words.
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by paintingangels | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. It was a neat little poem that reminds me of winter. The image of winter is beautiful (even though I really dont like winter). Dont have much else to say other than good job
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by enigmaticone | [ Reply to This ]


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