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I Miss You


Author: Inkybro
ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55 /69 /39
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I Miss You



I just want to say how much I miss you,
How much you mean, and how much I need you,
How much I've cried and how much I've dialed,
Then hung up knowing I'd end up denied,
I just want to say how much I love you,
How much I care, and how much I want you,
How much I've begged and won in my sleep,
Then woke up in tears because it was a dream




Submitted on 2007-11-25 11:06:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  THis is such a beautiful poem! I was really touched by the purity of it and how much you got to transmit so many feelings. Short but beautiful!
| Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by rachel gless | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this is powerful, heart wrenching, and above all it made me cry. i love this piece. i am in this kind of situation at this moment and it sucks so much. the fact you can put so much emotion in so little a piece is amazing
| Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this is powerful, heart wrenching, and above all it made me cry. i love this piece. i am in this kind of situation at this moment and it sucks so much. the fact you can put so much emotion in so little a piece is amazing
| Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, the agony of heartbreak. We've all been there, so I'm sure I can speak for everyone when I say this piece is likely to touch all of your readers in a very personal place. That, my friend, is the mark of a good poet. I commend you, and I hope to read more from you very soon.
~Melissa~
| Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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