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What I Do Best

Author: Inkybro
ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55 /69 /39
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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What I Do Best

In trying to build courage
I've compiled a list
Of things that I feel
I do very best
I worry and wonder
I fail miserably
I'm a loser and I hurt
I talk before I think
I need reassurance
I need company
I hate being told
That I am needy
The nights go by too fast
The days go too slow
The weekends are seconds
In this all-time low

Submitted on 2007-11-25 11:57:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i think you have more potential to broaden an adolescents life. this didn't flow right at all and almost seemed forced. it can be hard to get one's feelings out in a way to relate to other people as well and try to bring a piece together. i think you can add some things to make this an even better piece
| Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
  Although this piece accurately and expressively communicates the lows of teenhood, I'm not sure it was really my cup of tea. Something about the flow just didn't sit right with me, but that is just my opinion... Other than that, let me just say on a side note that it will get better... I promise! Just hang in there and use these years to find out who you really are. Take care!
| Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]

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