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    dots Submission Name: Reddots

    Author: Drow_dancer04
    ASL Info:    18/female/Mukilteo,WA
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 1/2/8
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       This is an outcry from one of my original characters named Donavon, and this was a memory of his from when he was about 16. He was tortured by an insane, schizophrenic lady while chained to a bed... So any who, that is what this is...

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    As the day breaks, the sun rises red
    and spilled my blood all around me,
    as I lie on the bed.

    She knows how I look
    on the inside, where light
    never touches. With a hook
    and a knife, she stole my life.

    I never died, just lingered, broken.
    Never again to be loved.
    Never to be spoken
    to, nor to be with the ones I love.

    To late, their gone, no more.
    They died while I lay
    broken and gone. And in my core
    I knew to say:

    "No More!"

    - <3 Donavan

    Submitted on 2007-11-25 15:30:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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