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    dots Submission Name: Li Soldots
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    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 22/20/25
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 707
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       Written at a critical time in my life.. all about the choices I was making and how I felt stuck in wanting the negative so badly. I still do, and this was written in 2005 or 2006


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    dotsLi Soldots
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    I can't find peace of mind now
    I can't think of how it got like this
    I can't remember where I put my fist
    And that was over a year ago!!

    I can barely think straight now
    I can rarely remember their faces now
    And their voices are lost among the shattering glasses
    And the spoons are resting now, pissed at the way time passes

    Where did it run off to?
    It got lost in this depression
    And the spoons took it down more
    Now I'm just sitting, just waiting with my confessions

    I need to rinse myself of these sins
    They keep attacking me
    And they feel exactly like pins
    Or needles

    And the thoughts just won't come anymore
    The need to get it all out is gone
    Now I'd rather let everything set in
    See if I can last this way for very long

    (So now I'm sitting in the spoon
    I'm the little piece of cotton
    Soaking everything I can up
    And then something comes in
    To take it from me
    And give it to someone more deserving)




    Submitted on 2007-11-25 18:33:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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