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    dots Submission Name: We're Only Weedsdots
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    Author: informations
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 22/21/26
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 970
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    Description:
       Written for the man I love who is losing himself so rapidly.


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    dotsWe're Only Weedsdots
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    We're not only beautiful
    We're smart and strong
    We've lasted this long

    But somehow, some way
    We've strayed
    Can we be saved?

    We're only weeds
    In a garden gone to stone
    Once we were seeds
    But now we are grown

    I grew your way on purpose,
    If you did not know
    I don't normally go that low

    I think that you are worth it
    I believe in you
    I think you know that too

    We're only weeds
    In a garden turned to stone
    And the ones that love us are the bees
    Even though we're over grown

    We're only weeds in a garden, my dear
    And yet, I think that it is best




    Submitted on 2007-11-25 18:44:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very sweet, and true. i would like to have heard more about the relation to weeds because what you had was good and i know if you wrote more it would be even better than it already is, good job overall. -issa
    | Posted on 2007-11-25 00:00:00 | by canarddoue | [ Reply to This ]


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