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    dots Submission Name: The Truth As A Misconceptiondots

    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       Just something political, artsy and brave.

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    dotsThe Truth As A Misconceptiondots

    The Auditorium is hollow, reflective.
    Lips part, breath escapes, forever lost
    within the Auditorium.
    Uttered word, so loud against willing ears.
    Twice, three, fourth, fifths.
    Echoing off the walls
    to ride waves of invisibility
    back to me.
    "We're not fighting our own war now!"
    A scream, from all directions?
    No, from the stage.
    Shadowed figure, no light, where's the markup?
    "We're letting them guide us
    by our open, willing hands!"
    Shouting, darkened persona, upon the stage?
    The seats are empty, who's this person...
    yelling at?
    "How can we stand for this?
    How can we let them rob us
    of our very Freedom!"
    There, second row, another figure.
    Peering eyes try to focus on the
    dark, hollow Auditorium.
    "We are not to be pushed aside
    while our Leader takes us to war!"
    Another clap.
    This figure, seated in the second row
    who's hands come together like murky water.
    "We will not be led blindly!
    This is not our war!"
    Shadow on the stage...gone.
    Shadow in the seat...gone.

    Submitted on 2007-11-25 23:47:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm. I don't think that I really grasped the true meaning of this poem. Could ya let me in on it? Would be much appreciated...and then I shall give you a real critique and not just this confusion. : )

    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      If only more of us were brave enough to let it be known how we feel about political things, and not let it deteriorate into some kind of name-calling masquerade of concern...

    Brava, bravissima!

    I only wish I were as brave as you.

    Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah... Our open, willing hands. Those hands that won't raise when calling for objections. Those hands that stifle mouths, not sure what to say in the first place...

    I like it.

    Political, artsy, and brave indeed. I gave a little groan because I thought it'd be another one of those clichéd, look-how-wrong-this-administration-is and/or making fun of the president type-poems. But it flipped on me, and I must say I like it a lot.

    I've read some of your other pieces, and you have this kind of ....yeah, artsy... way of writing. It's very back-and-forth--multiple things going on at once. Some people have trouble with that--it winds up in a terrible mess, but you're pretty good at it. Your end result is powerful, but not to pretentious. For and yet strangely against the literati... Bravo.


    Sad, though, that the speechmaker's truths fell on one pair of ears, only to leave at the end of it all...

    Alas, only a few more months till some new hope is brewed..........

    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]

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