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    dots Submission Name: Tears of the Heartdots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 565
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsTears of the Heartdots
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    There are days, when I'm so thankful
    that you have been a part of my life.
    And then there are days when I have no idea
    what I'd do without you.
    I'm growing up, dad, and because of you
    I have been able to face the world
    and all of it's insecurities.
    I've survived this long and you're the key
    to my survival.
    Without you, dad, I don't know who would've
    taught me about the stars
    and why people can be so cruel.
    Without you, dad, I seriously believe
    I wouldn't be here today.

    As I go through this life,
    I can honestly say that there are things
    I will never forget.
    Like late nights on the top of your truck,
    looking for UFOs, and only finding
    misleading satellites.
    You played along with the idea
    that it was long lost life,
    and was a UFO because I was
    so certain.

    You're the only person
    I can cry about
    for no reason.
    Because I never want anything
    to happen to you,
    and I wish selfishly
    that you would live forever
    with me.
    Dad, you're my best friend
    and the confidante I never had.
    You know things about me
    that I haven't even whispered
    to the night.

    I'll never forget our
    long nights in the kitchen,
    just us talking about everything
    and not even caring that I had
    school or you work.
    And in the morning
    you would just let me stay home,
    but you'd always go to work
    because that was brutal reality.

    You sheltered me from life
    for so long, because you knew
    that it was harsh and
    unforgiving.
    For that, dad, I can never
    thank you enough.
    You kept me safe from all things
    evil, until you knew
    that you taught me enough...
    and that I was ready
    to know the truth about them.

    But, there were things that happened
    that you could not shelter me from.
    Instead of bearing a heavy hand,
    you opened your arms,
    and forgave me anyway.
    We've had our differences,
    but they were so minute
    that I've even forgotten them.

    As I head into the stages of
    adulthood, I have begun to realize
    that a lot of what you taught and
    told me...is true.
    As I ignored your speeches,
    but listened anyway,
    you were right.
    "When you get to that age..."
    you'd say, and I would just smile
    because I never thought I would.
    You were right.

    A lot of people never
    think about the future,
    and the passing of a loved one.
    But, dad, I can honestly say
    that I will never get over your
    death. I will never move on
    from that loss,
    and everyday I will mourn
    for you in some way
    until we meet in Heaven.
    And I promise you dad,
    that I will make sure that
    everyone remembers you the way I see you:

    The man with a heart as big as life itself, without judgement and all the passion God's bucket could carry. The man who walked in life with shoes that wore down, just to mark his journeys in scuffs and broken string. The man, who laughed more often than he cried, and the man who loved his children and wife without condition. The man who had many faults, but more attributes...the man who touched more people than he thought. I love you dad.




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      Wow. Reading this poem brought me to tears. And also inspired me. I have been wanting to write a poem about my Dad for awhile now, because I know how much he would love it, words, meant only for him and no one else. I thank you for the inspiration and for making me realize that I should write something NOW before it's too late. As I read this aloud (I like to do that with poems that I really like), I had that thing goin on at the back of my throat like I knew that I was going to cry, but I just kept reading on anyway. I agree with Passionbyapathy, that even though this poem was long, I didn't lose interest. Gomenasai, I am sorry that you're father died when you were so young. Again, thank you. This really touched me in a way that cannot be described.

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem REALLY brought out a personal emotion in me. Reading it through, there were stanza's that described specific events in your life, and those really hit me. Theres something about the personal aspects of poetry, that hit harder then all the metaphors and similes in the world. As I read about you and YOUR life, I felt connected, like I was experiencing it with you, ands that something to be really proud of conveying through a poem. It was long, but I didn't lose interest, it carried me through the entire poem with as much emotion as the first couple stanza's brought out in me.
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a truly moving peice. It's great to know that there are people out there who are so truly connected to other people. Especially when that person is your father. The love you have for him truly comes through with your writing. I'm sorry he never got to read this peice, though i'm sure he knew. From what you have written i can honestly say I would have been honored to know your father. He sounds like the type of person we need more of.

    Thank you for letting us read this.

    Guermo
    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]
      I almost cried... If you added more stanza... I assure you I would certainly CRY...
    I like the realationship U had with ur father ...N I also like the way U described it ... I can definitly imagine it !!!
    I liked when You said :

    You know things about me
    that I haven't even whispered
    to the night.


    I'll never forget our
    long nights in the kitchen,
    just us talking about everything
    and not even caring that I had
    school or you work.
    And in the morning
    you would just let me stay home,
    but you'd always go to work
    because that was brutal reality.


    We've had our differences,
    but they were so minute
    that I've even forgotten them.

    And I promise you dad,
    that I will make sure that
    everyone remembers you the way I see you:

    Almost everything...
    Really touching... Good Work....

    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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