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    dots Submission Name: Dig It?dots
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    Author: Skillessbasterd
    ASL Info:    19/withdiseasedstrangers/
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 497/676/207
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Society
    Total Views: 114
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1591



    Description:
       ok so as some,
    or one
    or two
    of you
    might of knew
    i got a set of drums
    which is fun

    me and a friend of mine from work were tryin to get a jam together saturday. somewhere between four bar blues and lennon's "come together" we had a cool little punkish rythm goin. this is in vein....worth the time investing in development?

    dig it?


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    all that diggin and you're bound to make a hole
    all we're preachin we're not weepin for control
    all that diggin you'll be livin in a hole
    yeah we dug it so we're fuckin in the hole

    front to the truth
    truth to the back
    all for your tooth
    like your tooth could react

    all that diggin and you're bound to find a soul
    with all that diggin found itself in a hole
    all that diggin you'll be livin as a soul
    yeah we dug it so we're fuckin from the soul

    front for the youth
    youth get your backs
    all for "your" truth
    when the truth ain't like that

    pray now father
    children walk the wire
    truth told a fib
    and now the fibber is the liar

    all that diggin and you're bound to find a home
    all we dug still we haven't found the bones
    you stuck em in the corner like no one else should know
    but you never dug it so how you fuckin know

    back to the stars
    stars to the sky
    truth for the youth
    when the truth is it's lies

    all that diggin stones are proned to be thrown
    but rest your head with the dead and their bones
    diggin for a feelin we're just reelin for a home
    just keep on diggin cuz you're not fucking alone

    pray now father
    the stars sold the sky
    the moon told the earth
    that he really was the light





    Submitted on 2007-11-26 07:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      (On an unrelated note, the title has sent "Sex and Candy" into my head...)

    But other than that, I don't really know what to tell you. I will say that "Come Together" is one of two Beatles songs that I could listen to for eternity. That, and four-bar blues are fun to play.

    ... As for the piece, it's kind of unfocused, but songs are poetic anomalies. They really don't have to be amazing to be fun to listen to and sing along to and play...

    ... Helpful??

    ...

    pray now father
    the stars sold the sky
    the moon told the earth
    that he really was the light

    Good words to end on.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]
      I adore this piece. It's strong, yet has a level of locality. Like, everyone could have something to relate to this, though not really. Contradiction. It's lovely.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]
      front to the truth
    truth to the back
    all for your tooth
    like your tooth could react



    That is officially the best stanza of all poetry and there should be a book discussing it's greatness.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Secrets Unheard | [ Reply to This ]


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