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    dots Submission Name: Thanksdots

    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Yea It's late Thanksgiving was thursday but ohwell. I wrote this one for my mom. I think. She isn't really a fan of most of my peoms but oh well it's the only way I can honestly express myself. Enjoy. ^-^

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    I'm thankful for the love,
    you show everyday.
    I'm thankful for the smiles,
    you've shown along the way.

    I'm thankful for the happiness,
    you've placed in my heart.
    I'm thankful for your genes,
    that have made me so smart.

    I'm thankful for the food,
    you prepare through the year.
    I'm thankful to know,
    that you'll always be there.

    No matter the hardship,
    Nor the strife,
    You'll always be,
    A huge part of my life.

    I wanted to say something,
    I don't say it nearly enough,
    Thank you for everything.
    I couldn't have survived without your love.

    Submitted on 2007-11-26 10:21:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's sweet. It's good to see some people still appreciate their parents. Too many kids don't realize everything they've done for us. This is a great poem, I hope to see more like it.
    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by chaos_bite | [ Reply to This ]
      What an absolutely beautiful poem! I'm sure your mom would be very moved by it. You should have it printed so she can keep it close to her heart and cherish it every day. You write very well and I'm sure if you share more with her she'll be very proud!

    I'm impressed with the ease at which you find the correct words - I'm not too keen on rhyming but when it's done really well... what can I say!

    Bravo and keep writing.
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really sweet ......

    very endearing and I'm quite sure, is well deserved .....the manner in which you have described the person/s you have written this poem for is pretty creative...............

    They have not only passed on their 'genes' to us, but have given us a lot of love and wisdom to hold value all through our lives.......

    The rhyme was steady throughout, making it more enjoyable.......

    There's a correction to be made though.......

    Its not " A huge part if my life"
    ..but "A huge part of my life"

    Otherwise, it is fine

    Good Work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Im not sure why your mum doesnt like your poetry. Maybe like mine she just doesnt like the ones that hit home too hard and bring up feelings she doesnt want to face?... You write well and I couldnt imagine a mum not being proud (this is stormyskies writing on behalf of paul/his father)

    I am a mum and I think everything my daughter does is wonderful...im sure your mum would too...maybe she gives you the wrong impression...i know that my mum does...yet when i wrote a religious piece (and she is very religious) she printed it for all her friends...

    Anyway enough of that and back to your poem. This is a nice tribute to your mum, it really sums up how our mums are there for the important moments and because of that no matter how tough it can get having a relationship with her, its worth it. And you are right...because no matter what deep down they always want whats best for you...well good parents anyway LOL

    I think that the last verse is by far the best and summarises it well...in fact you could just write that on its own and it would almost be as meaningful...Well Done!
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Pizzolopoetry | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh love of the parents huh? good poem i like it but i cant say that i relate!
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]

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