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    dots Submission Name: Little wishesdots
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    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 790
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 547



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    dotsLittle wishesdots
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    Oh God, protect me from the sins of jealousy
    Never let me lost in the steps i walk
    Don't let me cross with my worst enemy
    The beast chained inside this weak body

    Let my temper down under
    Keep me away from making people suffer
    For these words i have tongued
    May sparkles another bloodsport

    Never let my eyes,nose and intuition fail me
    Never let my choices drive me into suicide
    Never let my woman cheat on me
    These simple wishes may never hinder You




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 11:18:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I favor the simplistic style you used here, the kind of "I'm talking to God, he knows what I'm saying" feel. I've had many times I've written to God, and this goes right along with those. I commend you, and amen, amen to that.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]


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