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    dots Submission Name: Nobody Girldots
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    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 634
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1350



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    dotsNobody Girldots
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    Maybe I wear baggies
    and white socks with flip-flops,
    maybe I don't like listening to rave
    and I'm not on the social mountaintops,
    maybe I don't care about the things
    that make your worlds twirl,
    maybe you look at me and think:
    Gee, what a nothing girl.
    Maybe I like giving smiles
    which seems to be a sin today,
    and maybe I allow my imagination
    to sometimes run away,
    maybe you don't understand this
    and that's why you cannot see,
    if this make me a nothing girl,
    hey, that's ok with me!
    The world makes you believe
    your personality mustn't be detected,
    your face must be picture perfect
    and you have to wear cloths just the best, to be accepted.
    Maybe I look at you
    and feel sorry that you're blind,
    robots you have became,
    yourself you'll never find
    God made you, as well as me,
    this means I am something,
    the world is a liar
    and if I must be a nothing
    for you to see it,
    then so be it!
    The world makes you believe
    your personality mustn't be detected,
    your face must be picture perfect
    and wear cloths just to fit in.
    So that would mean I'm a nobody girl




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 12:05:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This I so true. I would like to know who told people how you have to be. Instead of being who you are. I'm all for personality and never cared to much for the clothes I wear. As long as I'm not forced to run around naked I'm happy. Good write, it is true and honest. ^-^ Nice job and well put.
    | Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. But I feel as if you could put a little more structure in this. I personally like seeing clear stanza breaks. But, in retrospect, the way the poem is now gives it a certain character, like its being different, just like in the way you describe yourself within the poem as well. But it's only good if that was what you meant it as. And then I just noted a few spelling errors, like:

    robots you have became

    and

    and wear cloths just the best, to be accepted.

    But on this one, it almost seems like a stylistic choice, cloths sounds more lyrical.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      so true. i loved the rhthym in this poem and the truthfulness behind it. i can totally relate to it! *applause*
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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