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    dots Submission Name: You Will Find Me?dots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 787
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsYou Will Find Me?dots
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    Sometimes, when I lie in bed,
    you will stare at me.
    You know not that I am
    awake,
    though you still stare...
    As if expecting something.
    When I am asleep?

    Expectations.

    You arise at 6 in the morn,
    nudging me to awake as well.
    "I want to see you
    before I head to work."
    You spell out.
    I have to comply?
    You won't leave me be.

    Letdown.

    Your day off, and I'm energetic.
    "Let's go somewhere."
    You're at your computer,
    avoiding the world as it
    collides around you.
    "I have to finish."
    I'll go by myself.

    Explanation?

    I've caught glimpses of you,
    going through my phone messages.
    Going through my computer:
    pictures, inbox, recieved files,
    my blog.
    Then, you offer a rebuttal and say
    "How am I supposed to know what you do?"

    Trust...

    We've argued, the walls are shaken.
    "It's all me!" You'd vehemently express.
    You never say anything about me...
    I've cried more than I ought to,
    and you take it as if I'm emotional.
    "I trust you more than anyone..."
    I can't believe these words.

    Heartbreak.

    Love can give flightless birds
    wings.
    Love can also hinder sight.
    When am I going to get the chance
    to rest my head on your shoulder?
    You mention that I never "warm up" to you.
    I want to, dearly, though
    you're always first in line.

    Thinking only of you.

    We're in love, my better half.
    I'm receding slowly into the grasp
    of everlasting fantasy.
    Yet, you hang onto reality as if
    it's floating away.
    I'm reaching out for you, reaching,
    slowly drowning...

    You will find me?




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 12:29:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This explains exactly how I've been feeling lately. Wanting to express how humans can so easily be suspicious and distrustful and that trust is sometimes hard, but very important. Especially when it comes to love. Awesome read/write!

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    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      I definitely relate to the feeling of a lack of trust sometimes found in a relationship.

    This expresses your feelings perfectly to me. I'm glad you shared it.
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, the various poetry on here pretty much paints a picture of "ups" and "downs" of your relationship. Everyone who gets into a committed serious relationship experiences those ups and downs, and it takes FOREVER to iron out all the kinks (hell, most dont even come up till after the first year). But what I am most amazed at, in terms of this poem as well as others, is how you are able to take a rather common situation, that I myself have been in, and consider stale, and turn it into something interesting and unique. You tell a plain story in a way that makes it no longer plain, but unrealistically real (if that makes any sense). Keep adding your own spin on things, Its captivating.
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]
      caution and free worry.

    this piece has a hauting feel to it, turning the living to ghosts.

    i feel like im staring in through a rain streaked window at this.

    a sorry life.

    striving to make it work is half the struggle.

    the other half is learning to give up and find solace elsewhere?

    or perhaps finding the key to fit the lock?

    it's all a jumble.

    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]


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