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    dots Submission Name: Snowdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 685
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 785



    Description:
       An odd contemplation from waching about twenty musicals. Take this as you will, it's not really a poem or a random thought....


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    dotsSnowdots
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    There is snow here,
    cold and white on the ground,
    but no snow there,
    how strange in a world so round.

    It gets darker so much faster,
    and people talk a little strange,
    back there it's all the good things,
    It's all so different, but so same.

    And that place in the distance,
    That one past the snow,
    that land I grew up,
    oh, that is my home.

    Home is not where the heart is,
    It's the memories and tears,
    Home, is where the cold won't reach,
    and all the time is moments, not years.

    So even if here isn't there,
    Home a place in a land long gone,
    This is heart still beats,
    And the memories sing strong.




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 12:32:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Home is not where the heart is,
    It's the memories and tears,
    Home, is where the cold won't reach,
    and all the time is moments, not years.


    I love that stanza, it just gives me goosebumps.

    Also, last stanza, third line. Is it This is heart still beats, or This heart still beats,?

    It's probably the latter, but thought I'd ask before I told you otherwise.

    Great piece.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]


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