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    dots Submission Name: of medots
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    Author: DBC
    ASL Info:    21/m/ar
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 55/59/29
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsof medots
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    many many things
    are appearing to me all at once
    as if an overload of the imagination is in place
    my mind sets off at a race
    with the toothbrush on my teeth without toothpaste
    with a gun up my sleeve used in haste
    my switchblade at fingers tip
    rips rips through
    the hardcore
    images
    of
    me




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 14:06:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoa, That poem was just loaded with imagery. But I really liked it actually. At first I thought it was going to be a suicide poem and its many options. But no. I liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]


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