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    dots Submission Name: Messagesdots
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    Author: BlueTorcher
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 65/34/38
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I feel alone like no one cares
    As if I’m invisible

    The weight of life
    It gives me such a fright

    The ups and downs
    The round and rounds
    Spin me across the sky

    As if not forgiving me
    For well, living

    Its seems absurd
    To think of it
    Especially when no one knows
    When life will end

    The ends and outs of life
    You would think
    That we would be use to our strife

    The pain and suffering
    The loss and gain
    The feelings that not even we are human

    We stroll around in this game called life
    As if we have no care

    No care for you
    No care for me
    No care for anyone in-between

    And when you actually start to think
    Then I start to see
    See why we go through such things

    Hate
    Lies
    Deceit

    And if I am correct
    We do these things, for one reason
    Because we know beneath it all
    We are all actually small
    Weak, small, and defenseless

    We are so weak
    And we are so small
    That we have trouble trusting anyone

    Anyone at all
    Because beyond the bravo
    Beyond the bics (biceps)

    We are as I said before
    Very, very, small

    A message to those we hide,
    Pretending that they are something
    They aren’t; even in the smallest of ways.

    Just be your self and someday
    Maybe you won’t have to hide your face




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 18:07:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey.
    i like this stanza a lot:

    'The ups and downs
    The round and rounds
    Spin me across the sky '

    the last line inparticular, just seems to fit well

    this feels like a stream of conciousness poem, which i like, it makes some good points, and makes you think some, which is always a good thing..

    coming from a 17 year old, you're wise for a 13 year old.

    thanks for posting.

    Guermo
    | Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]



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