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    dots Submission Name: Isadora Duncan's Firedots
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    Author: Cirruculum
    ASL Info:    17/Male/SW Kansas
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 36/35/17
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 102
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 791



    Description:
       To learn more about Isadora Duncan, look her up on Google.

    I'm looking for some nitpicky details. I wrote this as best as I could over Thanksgiving for a English paper.

    Have a good day,
    Cirruculum (TK)


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    dotsIsadora Duncan's Firedots
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    My mother played piano.
    And I, Isadora, would dance.
    When our house caught fire,
    I mimicked the flames with the arch of my body.
    My mother stared solidly into the blaze.
    She leapt only once,
    when the piano peeled away from its legs
    and twanged into a crackled chord.
    When the song ended,
    curls of dust rose in adagio
    and followed my lead.
    My spirit found its form in fire.
    My dance ignited in sparks.
    Now I spring past myself into your light.
    I am your blink and your grasp
    your leap up from the kitchen table,
    the turn of your head to your lover's voice.
    My spirit is the static of your negligee
    As the material clings.
    I cling and you are lit.




    Submitted on 2007-11-26 18:47:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is really quite superb.
    so i did as you said and looked her up.
    pioneer of modern dance.
    killed in some sort of freak auto accident.
    shocked audiences with her style.
    i find it difficult to discover anything worth picking apart here. i guess if i had to pick something i would maybe flipflop the lines "my spirit..." and "my dance..." but that is only me.
    this flows just how i picture her dancing after reading about her and seeing a photo.
    very nicely executed.
    thats all.
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    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]



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