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    dots Submission Name: Pitiful Lovedots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsPitiful Lovedots
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    It's so pitiful
    how I can't stop thinking about you
    It's so pathetic
    how I want something I can't have

    vodka at night isn't changing anything
    I still crave you my fine addiction
    staring at the lake, all I can remember was us
    and how we used to be

    The stars can't change what we had together
    listen to my rant by the lake side
    the fishies calling to me
    one step closer to paradise

    what did it feel like the night you walked to the
    bottom of the lake?
    Haha, the moon is empty, waiting
    agian and agian

    This vodka isn't doing anything
    singing to you on a full moon
    remember that night when you went to the lake
    were you thinking of me?

    water caressing my skin, doesn it know my tears make it grow?
    gasping for a breath that isn't mine
    do you know I hate you
    Did you remember me when you went to sleep
    was I your last thought?

    A rant to the lake that took you away
    do you still remember me?
    Do you ever think of me, on the other side?
    Did you ever wonder what you did to me?




    Submitted on 2007-11-27 16:52:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoa. The last stanza was like a slap in the face. - A good one though :D

    The stars can't change what we had together
    listen to my rant by the lake side
    the fishies calling to me
    one step closer to paradise

    The fishies
    LMAO
    It was all serious and sad and then I was like. Wait a minuite... LOL

    But yeah... :D


    &&
    water caressing my skin, doesn it know my tears make it grow?
    =
    water caressing my skin, does'nt it know my tears make it grow?
    --
    My favorite parts were

    --
    water caressing my skin, does'nt it know my tears make it grow?
    gasping for a breath that isn't mine
    do you know I hate you
    Did you remember me when you went to sleep
    was I your last thought?

    &

    vodka at night isn't changing anything
    I still crave you my fine addiction
    staring at the lake, all I can remember was us
    and how we used to be

    Good write, keep it up.
    <3
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! THis is amaing! I love the flow in this piece and the constant questioning. The last stanza sent chills through me. THis is an amazing write, so well thought out and beautifly writtin. Great work, keep on writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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