Cry Out in the Darkness by Aangskate

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Submission Name: Cry Out in the Darkness dots

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Author:	Aangskate
ASL Info:	18/male
Elite Ratio:	3.32 - 133/117/44
Words:	73

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	1055
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	435

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Cry Out in the Darkness dots

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I hear your voice
it mocks me
don't have a choice,
must learn to love, don't you see?

I'm trapped in this darkness,
despairs overwhelming
I feel so joyless
I keep trying,

But the rose's thorns keep pricking
the rock keeps falling
the clock is ticking
here I stand wailing
ignored,
unheard.

Submitted on 2007-11-27 19:19:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like it. love is a complicated thing. but its great nothing is better than a lover at your side.
| Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]
  I plea for help, for love. Gone ignored.
I silent scream echoing through your head, gone unheard.
Good write :)
I understand this more than I wish I did.
-Safire
keep it up
| Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this :) I love short poems, but this one could do with a tad more description. But still, it's wonderful.

-Katie.
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW. this poem showed great emtion! i really liked the flow. this is a really great write. Beautiful!
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
  I also think that the imagery is really fantastic...you have some really good adjectives...i would suggest giving the reader a little longer to absorb each picture..
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Pizzolopoetry | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good...and perhaps thats all you have for now but i think it could be longer...it concludes all too quickly or just as i get into the read...just my thoughts...(stormyskies on behalf of paul/his father)
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Pizzolopoetry | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW, i loved this. you really do have a talent many wish for. keep it up, you could be famous ^_^
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it, but you should have put more into it but i can tell , it was feelings from the top of your head, thats what i think makes it good,
| Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ]

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