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    dots Submission Name: I've never been a good painterdots
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    Author: Aaron Felix
    ASL Info:    17/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 141/148/71
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI've never been a good painterdots
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    I've never been a good painter,
    although my imagination's good enough,
    I don't know what kind of acid it would
    take to
    make her want to make you
    erase a single word.

    As I went outside to
    have a cigarette, the girls
    on the third floor were
    chattering indistinguishable
    from the birds in the trees. They
    are so young at heart,
    and so boring.

    As the other old soul
    (my old english teacher called
    me that once, it made an impression;
    she also thought I looked
    like I should have been named
    Benjamin),

    I am not so subtle as you. I
    can only draw on stone
    crude hieroglyphics
    in hope that readers reach
    some vague conclusion
    about lived experience.

    Oh, but when I feel that
    soft white hand guiding my clumsy
    wrist...
    I can even
    paint a sunset on a square of silk
    as it flutters lightly,
    floating in the breeze.






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