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    dots Submission Name: Where Must My Daddy Be?dots

    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Wrote this when I was 12 and missing my dad who worked on a merchant ship at that time.. Just found the original draft and thought I'd share it.

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    dotsWhere Must My Daddy Be?dots

    Where must my daddy be
    Oh! where must be he?
    Collecting gold on Treasure Island
    Or swimming in the sea?

    He says each year he goes away,
    To bring me toys with which I play
    But where he sails night and day
    How can I say?

    He comes back with frocks and socks
    For he cannot sew
    He comes back with ribbons for my locks
    And dollies nice and new

    Where must my daddy be
    Oh! where must be he?
    Is he a pirate with a patched up eye
    Or is he fishing merrily?

    He comes with stories of afar
    Of places far from where we are.
    His ship must be so fast to get to so many lands
    Just like a flying car.

    Where must my daddy be
    Oh! where must be he?
    But wherever my daddy is
    I know that he loves me.

    Submitted on 2007-11-28 07:31:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very reminiscent of an old childhood favorite of mine "Jack Prelutsky." A reminder of how a young one's mind simply works differently than an adult one.
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is beautiful... poetry is a God's gift to you, cherish it, nourish it.

    I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, it reminds me of my own childhood... So, in a way, i can relate to it.

    Great combination of imagination, anxiety... fantasy and love!!!
    | Posted on 2007-12-04 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it is amazing that you could write such complex and touching poetry when you were so young! That's really talent!
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      For a father, the hardest part about going to sea or off to some distant job is missing that precious little girl and her mother who wait anxiously for his safe return. I'm pleased you shared this honest look at the wondering and worry you felt during your daddy's absence. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm glad you found this and shared this with us Megan! It's always fun to come across pieces from long ago and see where we were then.

    That is hard to be away from family and I'm sure it was hard for your dad too but what interesting stories he must still have to share of that experience & you have some unique items too!

    Happy Day!
    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      THis is a beautiful piece. I can't beeave it was writtin at twelve though, that is amazing. It is verry well writtin! Great piece, keep on writing.

    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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