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Author: Squall Leon Hea
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104 /79 /29
Words: 134
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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sorry , hope I didn't do bad in it


Change



To change I must
Or Turn to Dust

And to be Wiped away
With no sense nor Words to say

Put aside forgotten right there
With nothing but pain to bear

With apologise and sorries
Writing diffrent stories

about the time when it was " we"
A time when an Angel's smile I can see

Together we were
now together is not there

I love you from the buttom of my heart
and really don't know where to start

To change my words or change my act
My love to you is a fixed Fact

A dust I shall not be
I promise you and we shall see

My love for you , make's me , me
Without you...I don't know where I would be




Submitted on 2007-11-28 10:30:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hiya love! Its beautiful! I think this is my favorite of your poems, your definetly improveing (keep it up!)

Anywho, my favorite stanza is:
To change my words or change my act
My love to you is a fixed Fact


lovely job baby
-Love- Safire
| Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is really good i liked it, i can really relate to wanting someone to make me and him an us, but i really hope your turned out better than mine did cause i hate this feeling. but anyway your writing was beautiful i could see what you wrote and could feel everything that you felt. it was amazing, good job Joanna
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
  nice! Like the poem!!! Short and sweet comment LOL
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by NEO Raven | [ Reply to This ]
  AWEEEEEEEEEE this is so sad to me. i can relate to this in several senses but mostly in the lost love and wishing to make me us. I think this was very well written!
| Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]


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