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    dots Submission Name: Changedots

    Author: Squall Leon Hea
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104/79/29
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       sorry , hope I didn't do bad in it

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    To change I must
    Or Turn to Dust

    And to be Wiped away
    With no sense nor Words to say

    Put aside forgotten right there
    With nothing but pain to bear

    With apologise and sorries
    Writing diffrent stories

    about the time when it was " we"
    A time when an Angel's smile I can see

    Together we were
    now together is not there

    I love you from the buttom of my heart
    and really don't know where to start

    To change my words or change my act
    My love to you is a fixed Fact

    A dust I shall not be
    I promise you and we shall see

    My love for you , make's me , me
    Without you...I don't know where I would be

    Submitted on 2007-11-28 10:30:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hiya love! Its beautiful! I think this is my favorite of your poems, your definetly improveing (keep it up!)

    Anywho, my favorite stanza is:
    To change my words or change my act
    My love to you is a fixed Fact

    lovely job baby
    -Love- Safire
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good i liked it, i can really relate to wanting someone to make me and him an us, but i really hope your turned out better than mine did cause i hate this feeling. but anyway your writing was beautiful i could see what you wrote and could feel everything that you felt. it was amazing, good job Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      nice! Like the poem!!! Short and sweet comment LOL
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by NEO Raven | [ Reply to This ]
      AWEEEEEEEEEE this is so sad to me. i can relate to this in several senses but mostly in the lost love and wishing to make me us. I think this was very well written!
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]

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