Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Perchance to Dreamdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Chasm City
    ASL Info:    19-21/M/Sweden
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 1/3/4
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 948
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1028



    Description:
       

    I don't really know if this needs an explanation... Based on a true story :P

    I'd love a review on the actual song.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsPerchance to Dreamdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Hard to focus on the movie
    There's just so much more to see right next to me
    Standing just outside your doorway
    I'm bewildered by your smile, please stay a while

    Close the door, no one is looking
    You could easily disappear in here tonight
    To die, to sleep
    To sleep, perchance to dream of love
    Lying next to what we're dreaming of

    Keep the lights on
    I will give you all of me
    Come a bit closer
    I can't get enough of you

    Just this moment, just this second
    Another kiss and I can say I've lived my life
    Tonight I'm yours, tomorrow I'll be here
    Lying next to you, my dear

    Keep the lights on
    I will give you all of me
    Come a bit closer
    I can't get enough of you

    Keep the lights on
    I will give you all of me
    Come a bit closer
    I can't get enough of you





    Submitted on 2007-11-28 15:08:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This is probably one of the most beautiful songs I have heard in a long long time. You have such an amazing voice- it's breath taking. The lyrics are stunning. You put a very classy and soft spin on what love should be and that is so hard to do these days. GREAT GREAT JOB! I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! I don't think I can say that enough!

    -Katie.
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    153674

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry