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    dots Submission Name: Petals of Sunflower Blooms.dots
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    Author: numbertwenty
    ASL Info:    16 Female
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 55/25/9
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 695
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    Bytes: 634



    Description:
       How a guy isn't always your better half, no matter how hard you want him to be.


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    dotsPetals of Sunflower Blooms.dots
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    Dancing on petals of sunflower blooms.
    The air pushing through me
    The sun talking to me
    Not sure if I want to go home.

    Dancing on shards of broken glass rooms.
    The rage pulsing through me
    The evil yelling at me
    I hate how I am always alone.

    Two worlds:
    One good
    One evil

    Two loves:
    One trust
    One Lust

    We're two halfs of a nonexistent whole.
    One you, One me.
    But I'm my own better half.

    Dancing on petals of sunflower blooms
    Because I've been rid of you.




    Submitted on 2007-11-28 18:25:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it! Only flower can show how love lie's bleeding. For the goodye heart H.Redd
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by H.Redd | [ Reply to This ]


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