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    dots Submission Name: Rosedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsRosedots
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    A flower spreads open,
    Seamstress of nature.
    Integrate the pollen
    Of some fallen confer.

    Intersperse Life's seed,
    Repose on weed's paragon leafs.
    Caressed in exposing genteel,
    Dispersing iridescent gleams.

    Aroma wafts vermillion,
    Petals novel and ordain.
    Stigmas alms ambrosia,
    Nectars pond sweet elysian.

    Lambent dearest flower
    Afterglow of a faint morose.
    Crastine autumn sorrows,
    And does not wither the rose.




    Submitted on 2007-11-28 20:12:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      And does not wither the rose.

    THe line is so beautiful. It seems to me that this piece is a variety of beautiful, reminds me of female competitiveness, that last line.

    Thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2011-07-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      You seem like a delicate writer. You try as hard as possible to keep the object's innocence and protect their character when you write. It's easy to manipulate the object, and then exaggerate them to your liking, for visual/literal purpose. A lot of writers do that, and yes, it could be impressive But here, you've selected words, that make your efforts to make them visually stunning even more impressive than the writers that deform the object completely.

    Aroma wafts vermillion,
    Petals novel and ordain.
    Stigmas alms ambrosia,
    Nectars pond sweet elysian.

    Lambent dearest flower
    Afterglow of a faint morose.
    Crastine autumn sorrows,
    And does not wither the rose.


    These were beautiful.
    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Frankly i am no great english literate.
    What the hell have you written i did not understand anything.

    Please provide the meaning of the following
    Intersperse
    paragon
    iridescent
    genteel
    Lambent
    morose
    Crastine

    Well i do not know the meaning and so can i or anyone go to a dictonary and check it but for reading a poem none do that. Well if you want that only people who understand the above ASAP while reading then ignore these comments.
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]


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