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    dots Submission Name: Karmadots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsKarmadots
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    Iíve looted mountain abbeys in Nepal,
    And marveled at their gods of tangerine,
    And idols with huge eyes of beryls green
    To gape at arcane writings on the wall.
    Now when I sleep my mind is like a squall
    In Winter climes. No more am I serene
    And all regard me as a thing unclean
    From Bombay to the ports of Senegal.

    So now I wander where the steep trails rise
    Above the plain, beyond the cold plateau,
    My life is bleak and far from Paradise
    As I track through this endless waste of snow,
    For I am unrepentant as the drums
    Of some stupendous death till karma comes.




    Submitted on 2007-11-29 13:20:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lovely, truly. I think you did quite well with this. You know how much it thrills me to read about things that aren't about storm tossed ships and crashing waves on occaison, although I do enjoy those as well. This reminds me more of some of your arabesque pieces. You take an idea and then glorify it to the point where each word is dripping in jewels, incensce and silk.

    Magnificient.

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      great usage of words...complex in its own right....good writing...keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      I truly wish I could write this expressively. It is even more so deep to me because I believe adamantly in karma, and the Buddhist religion. It was beautifully written, with a wonderful flow. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by deepinthought | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, the wages of sin and the sinister payment due for crimes comitted! As usual, this is marvelously told with your expert structuring and deft rhyme! An excellent tale and rhyming story!
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a bad ass poem! I loved the way it flowed and the subject was cool.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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