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    dots Submission Name: Lonesomedots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    The air thickens,
    It becomes difficult to breathe,
    My heart sickens,
    And itīs getting even harder,
    To maintain my will to live.

    These are the thoughts,
    Of the lonesome,
    Who stops,
    To carry the weight,
    Unfortunately in tons,
    He awaits his fate.

    Iīve cried silent tears,
    And eventhough I tried,
    Throughtout these years,
    I couldnīt lie that,
    Iīve seen my end,
    So near.

    Now that I experience,
    Lonesome in this cold world,
    I know for a fact life is serious,
    When it comes,
    To watching your life tumble,
    And swirl.

    Submitted on 2007-11-29 14:49:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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