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    dots Submission Name: I Alwaysdots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Perhaps many of us, have experienced similar feelings.


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    dotsI Alwaysdots
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    I always find, that love is blind
    No matter come what may
    Most all the time, come rain or shine
    It steals my heart away

    I always feel, love is surreal
    With no meaning at its core
    Like a painted smile, it stays a while
    Then it fades away once more

    I always see, a love for me
    So true without beseech
    But it brings pain, cause once again
    Loveís forever out of reach

    I always try, to ask love why
    It does not call on me
    Yet still I wait, then contemplate
    And ponder endlessly

    I always pray, that love someday
    Will set my heart to beat
    To kill my woe, and then Iíll know
    My life is now complete





    Submitted on 2007-11-29 16:04:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This sure is a very beautiful write-up....

    There is so much insight and` beauty in these lines..... one can make out that these are genuine heartfelt feelings which are penned down quite skillfully.

    .....you're good at writing these sentiments that are sometimes could be so difficult to expess.......

    The rhyme is good and on the whole, the poem flows well.... .... nice complementary poem to the emotion of 'love' ....poets have written on 'love' all through the ages and have never failed to capture the delight of millions...


    .......yours is one of the best poems that I have read....

    ... good work.
    | Posted on 2008-03-15 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Nicely Written....
    | Posted on 2008-02-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your work as always Frank, you are adept at portraying pure emotion, you have a real gift, one that some of us can only aspire to obtain. My favorite lines in this piece are

    "But it brings pain, cause once again
    Loveís forever out of reach"

    and

    "Like a painted smile, it stays a while
    Then it fades away once more"

    Which is generally the only thoughts most people have about love - always just out of reach. Hopefully it will not always fade away.

    love n luck
    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      All your writing is lovely, Frank; but, I believe your true calling is the language of love.

    This is my favorite stanza:
    "I always feel, love is surreal
    With no meaning at its core
    Like a painted smile, it stays a while
    Then it fades away once more"

    Always wonderful to read your words.
    Many thanks for sharing your poetry once again.

    ~Laura


    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, well. Lady Love and Lady Luck! Such magnificient ladies, both! And how they tease and torment us belagured guys!!!

    Excellent rhyme and story, once again Frank! I just automatically know that when you write something, it's gonna be good!

    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really love the words you use its very well done.
    | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by wordofsurrender | [ Reply to This ]


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