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    dots Submission Name: The Fire of Dawndots

    Author: nomad knight
    Elite Ratio:    6.66 - 110/75/41
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       All of this poem was written on the spot while I watched the sun rise from my home. Besides spell check, I have not yet made any significant changes to this piece what so ever. Though I think i want to refine it further, i'm putting it in it's near origional state to see what people think so far of it.

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    dotsThe Fire of Dawndots

    In the early hours of morning
    Beyond the forested hills
    Still darkened by cover of night
    Golden streaks of vibrant orange
    Streak beautifully across the sky
    Above the grey silhouettes
    Of the far distant mountains

    The magnificent fire burning away night
    Its flames tipped with glowing pink hues
    Consumes the darkness enveloping me.
    Anticipating the glorious finale approaching
    The fire’s source has yet to rise from hiding
    As if waiting for the sky to become ripe
    Before bursting from the rocky peaks

    The fire’s intensity subsides
    Emphasizing the brilliant entrance
    That comes like a rising crescendo
    From a great orchestra of silent beauty
    It reaches the full height of magnificence
    The humbling presence of the great sun
    Fills my soul with awe and wonder

    Like a servant my heart bows to it
    With supreme power it brings day
    Vanquishing the retreating night
    And asserting its dominancy
    Of all that behold the heat and light
    Boldly it takes seat in the throne of blue
    Decreeing “now is my reign as king”

    Submitted on 2007-11-29 17:37:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This piece made magnificent pictures come to my mind. I loved how the rythm is so slow in my head, how I just breathe and relax, and feel the peace in your poem. It was soulful, to me, and relaxing. You write with big words, but slowly, and naturaly, so that the flow is not disturbed by the translation in my head.

    Have not read anything quite like this, and must admit to say I really like it. I never write things with this calmness, with this.. How to say it.. This aura of quiet soothing. You really describe the event perfectly with this! As someone said further down, I could picture everything as clearly as if I was there myself with you, seeing the same as you saw. What more amazing sight can one find, than of a brilliant sunrise, or sunset. Amazing!
    | Posted on 2007-12-29 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a brilliant and forthright piece. It is free flowing and easily seen that you are a true enjoyer of nature. It reminded me of the night of The Incarnation. The true light of the world appeared and darkness scattered by His Coming. It also tells me of those dying and they are totally enraptured by The LightGiver .
    Good write! Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Your choice of words and the imagery you used really enabled me to actually see the sunrise in my mind - I can vividly see the orange glow, the forest and the mountains - very well done. I don't really think it needs much refining, as you say, but i would love to read it if you think you can make it even better.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Choc Chip | [ Reply to This ]

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