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    dots Submission Name: The Empty Glassdots
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    Author: deepinthought
    ASL Info:    26, F, Shaw AFB, SC
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 75/98/21
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsThe Empty Glassdots
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    I feel empty, like a glass that has been drained and set down to dry
    On the outside, caressed by the breeze
    But the warmth never touches the inside.
    Let me glean from the solitude some knowledge of myself,
    Let me learn who I am and for what I stand.
    But let me feel; let me feel something.
    Let me take from this life all that I can;
    A lover's touch, a child's smile, the feel of a kitten
    snuggled up against me.
    Let me cry, and often. Let me love just as much and just as deeply.
    Just let me feel...




    Submitted on 2007-11-29 18:23:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice release of thoughts. Things that I believe many will be able to relate to. The "kitten" reference took away from everything else I thought though.
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      Its one of the strangest things to be emotionally drained, you cant feel anything anaesthesia for the heart. You conveyed that really well.

    Good luck,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      A powerful and most poignant piece of poetry, wonderfully concieved and very deftly written...I liked this poem hugely! bravo... bravo... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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