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    dots Submission Name: Controldots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    19/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 32/53/54
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 150
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 665



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    Darkness exists in the light part of the soul
    Illusions so pretty are gaining control
    Of that memory part of the brain
    It has no path to attain

    Head on with the public face
    Mundane talks, lack of grace
    Lashes of sicknesses employ
    Dark spirits to gain and annoy

    Wave after wave, no seasons entertain
    That memory part of the brain.
    When there is nothing left to discover
    What romance remains, lovers?

    An ultimate dream remains ahead
    To discover on the death bed
    And when to receive is in control
    Only when darkness holds the soul.




    Submitted on 2007-11-29 18:35:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a really good poem, i like it :)
    great job
    | Posted on 2007-12-12 00:00:00 | by Specialme | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very different actually. Not at all what I expected. A pleasant surprise.
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]


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