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    dots Submission Name: shitty poemdots
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    Author: XmaryjaneX
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 142/38/9
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
    Total Views: 668
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    Stick A Needle In My Vein
    I Live To Die Another Day
    Numbness Dulls The Pain
    Of Yesterday

    Cross My Heart Wait To Die
    Do You Hear When It Cries
    From The Truth You Do Shy
    Why'd We Have To Say Good-bye

    Nothing Hurts Anymore
    My Sympathies All Out The Door
    Suffer The Poor
    I's What They'd Say
    For Their Sins They Will Pay

    Listen To My Voice
    You Don't Have A Choice
    Everything's Made To Be Broken
    You Won't Leave This World With A Token
    Of Anything You've Loved Or Spoken

    All Memories Lost To The Breeze
    A Newborn Calf
    A Lover's Whisper
    A Baby's Laugh
    All These Make The Past
    For They Will Never Last

    So When You're Lying On Those Big White Sheets
    While Your Loved Ones Sit And Weep
    Remember These
    You Knew This Day Would Come
    But You Tried To Turn Away And Shun
    The Day You'd Be Taken Away
    To A Place Where Lion And Lamb Lay
    Side By Side All The Day

    Or Will You Be One Of These
    Who Refused To Get On Your Knees
    To Beg God To Forgive, and Yourself To Repent
    And To The Devil Your Soul Was Sent

    Whether You're Wealthy Or Homeless
    The Point Still Remains So This
    Heaven Or Heavenless
    We're All Headed For The Same Sweet Darkness




    Submitted on 2007-11-29 19:49:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cool in a "this would make good rap" sort of way. I can almost envision the rapper prancing to and fro, in and out, making occasional gang sign while beaming over-animated expressions into the camera.

    This has some really good lines and imparts a solid, if not totally welcome philosophy. OK if I'm a whore, I'm at least a word-whore. Since I don't get paid, maybe I'm just a word-slut.
    | Posted on 2007-12-07 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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