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    dots Submission Name: Neon Signs and the Hand of Goddots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 5/24/19
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote it in my chemistry class, I liked it at first, but now I'm iffy about it, any comments suggestions, thoughts, encouragement, anything would help! thanks!

    PS- Didn't have music to play it to while writing either, might make some difference.


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    dotsNeon Signs and the Hand of Goddots
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    Verse1
    Sound breathes rhythm but I breathe smoke,
    I'd help you fly but your too damn old,
    Signs on the walls saying "go away!"
    Chasing me down because I wanted to stay,

    Chorus
    Fuck this place, it's a tragedy now,
    Hold tight to my collar, try not to drown,
    Neon signs singing why oh why?
    Melancholy tune is gonna make me cry,
    Touch the sky with a hand of gold,
    God got mad, so he sold my soul.

    Verse2
    Notebooks keeping all the secrets from me,
    Hallway clammers with the sound of teeth,
    Cuts on plastic too deep to fix,
    Lost in my mind, and lost in the bricks.

    Chorus

    I'll be home again real soon,
    I'll be home again real soon,
    I'll be home again real soon,
    I'll be home again real soon, I swear...






    Submitted on 2007-11-29 20:30:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i dont know how it would be as a song, but the meaning seems strong and straight foreward, which already makes it good.
    | Posted on 2008-12-24 00:00:00 | by WeirdNormality | [ Reply to This ]
      this looks pretty damn good. granted, i'd have to actually hear the tune and everything to know whether i'd like it as a song. one line really stuck out to me: "God got mad, so he sold my soul." thats killer!
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by stasisindarknes | [ Reply to This ]


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