Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password


Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 181
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
Total Views: 1217
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 1265


Just wanted to get this off my chest and onto paper. It is sth that i am having to go through and i am glad that i have somebody special with me during such trying times!

Dedicated to: my delilah! :D


Color i saw, in this black and white life-
When i saw you - when i first met you.
It just didn't occur to me that there could be consequences.
But i wanted you and craved for you.

Never knew that you had the same feelings-
Never knew that i could be somebody's.
You showed promise of love-
Love surplus than the water in the seas!

But with everything good there comes a price-
There comes fun, frolic, mirth but also grief, sorrow and sadness.
I can almost feel an invisible force
Pulling me away from you into absolute darkness!

DARKNESS containing "no love", "no emotions", "no feelings"-
Such DARKNESS before, i have never seen.
DARKNESS where i try to establish, "love", "emotions", "feelings"-
DARKNESS- i wish i never be in!

Life seems like a paradox and now a tough decision has to be made.
But just to 'decide' hurts you and if u hurt i hurt as well.
So lets do this together: hand in hand
Lets make our love a permanent spell.

Submitted on 2007-11-29 21:52:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  Reading this multiple times, I still get the same feeling: a dance.

You begin by coyly stepping with one another, graceful yet careful. Then, bodies together, you dance a romantic salsa of passion and intrigue.

Though, the melancholy waltz has to come, and you are slowly realizing there is consequences.

And alas, the dark interpretive comes along and you're left to fall into your fears.

But she is there, to grasp your hand and bring you upright. Again, bodies close with confidence, you dance to the rhythm of life...steady beats of heart guiding you all the way.

Love it!
| Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude, what a mean write, you struck me on a level there. Straight up, thats brilliant.
| Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?