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    dots Submission Name: Voicesdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 745
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1604



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    dotsVoicesdots
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    Far away, not so long ago,
    voices flowed and rose up.
    made each other, strong sense of
    harmonyversality
    allIaskofyou
    let nothing come between the two.

    Make way for regression.
    Look at you, smug deception.
    Baby girl, just a baby girl,
    big girls don't cry
    and this little girl lies
    to herself all the time now.
    Had to stay young somehow.

    You sang with me in the heat,
    danced with me in socked feet.
    Versatility, Harmony says hearme
    she says she says Imissyou
    she says
    let nothing come between the two.

    Little liar, heart on fire,
    slipping through the cracks, under the wire.
    What a vicious, puckish, thief you are,
    blinded by eyes full of stars.
    Steal what isn't yourstotake
    vanquish or ignore
    what is at stake.

    Remember sleeping this one night for sure,
    smoke says it's just thewaythingsare.
    But this is not the way.
    Harmonyversatility didn't they once say
    'This love has' and 'all the angels and the saints'

    is it too late
    is it too late?

    AllIaskofyou
    letnothingcomebetweenthetwo
    Because if you don't have the courage
    How can I, how can I?
    We become taciturn fools easily
    but you don't even try.

    [you made your choice
    I won't raisemyvoice
    it is to late it is too late
    to try alone to be a saint.]




    Submitted on 2007-11-30 02:43:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love how u made thangs run together in certin places it makes ur mind dance in circals
    | Posted on 2008-01-04 00:00:00 | by bleeding_words | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this part the most since it brings most of the poem together:

    "Little liar, heart on fire,
    slipping through the cracks, under the wire.
    What a vicious, puckish, thief you are,
    blinded by eyes full of stars.
    Steal what isn't yourstotake
    vanquish or ignore
    what is at stake."

    good, detailed work........and mush expression, emotion, and life was put into this.....
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]


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