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    dots Submission Name: Your Kissdots

    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsYour Kissdots

    How such a bad day
    Turned upside down.
    How one little kiss
    Turned up my frown.

    Fireworks, erupted
    My knees got weak.
    Even moments after
    I still could not speak.

    So I looked into your eyes
    How right it all felt.
    How one kiss from you
    Could make my heart melt.

    Our kiss was pure love,
    It was special and sweet.
    How my heart trembles
    When our lips meet.

    You light a fire
    That no one can miss.
    And it gets bigger and brighter
    Every time that we kiss.

    Submitted on 2007-11-30 09:21:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    You are very talented.
    I loved how this poem flowed and how nicely it rhymed.
    This poem reminds me of my ex boyfriend. I actually said this to him once:

    "How my heart trembles
    When our lips meet."
    Not in those exact words, but you get it.

    This is definately a favorite addition.

    P.S. I will keep reading.
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
      THis is good. I like it. It has a nice flow to it. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2008-03-09 00:00:00 | by sarahthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      ... i totally get this! i love it! ... it's amazing to feel that way, and the way you portrayed it was brilliant! :) great job, nice flow... Bravo!
    | Posted on 2007-12-11 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]

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