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    dots Submission Name: Butterflydots

    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 1012
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    Slowly emerging
    from the cocoon
    that I've been
    living in
    all my life.

    Cautiously peeking
    my head out
    into the world.

    Is it safe?
    Will I survive?

    Slowly breaking free
    of all that binds me,
    yet holding on
    ever so tightly to
    all I can't let go of.

    Stretching out my wings
    for the very first time,
    letting go of things
    not meant to be
    held on to.

    I take off slowly-
    looking back...
    wondering if I should
    go back
    to my

    Am I ready?
    Will I make it?

    I start to fly.
    letting the wind
    carry me higher
    than I've ever been.

    I look back
    and see my cocoon.
    SMALLER, Smaller, smaller
    I can barely see it.

    I look forward and
    see the world.

    I look at all that surrounds
    me, and see

    Submitted on 2007-11-30 09:23:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this poem. I really liked the metaphor of you to a butterfly, the way you changed and have new things that you are approaching in your life.

    The way that the poem was set up was.......different. Not neccesarily bad or good. It was unique and I kinda liked it personally.

    I am still a budding writer and so I am not really sure if I can pick out flaws with it but I really enjoyed it and I plan on reading more of your work.

    | Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by enigmaticone | [ Reply to This ]

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