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Author: CaughtRedhanded
ASL Info:    18/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94 /41 /22
Words: 150
Class/Type: Poetry /Me
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Slowly emerging
from the cocoon
that I've been
living in
all my life.

Cautiously peeking
my head out
into the world.

Is it safe?
Will I survive?

Slowly breaking free
of all that binds me,
yet holding on
ever so tightly to
all I can't let go of.

Stretching out my wings
for the very first time,
letting go of things
not meant to be
held on to.

I take off slowly-
looking back...
wondering if I should
go back
to my

Am I ready?
Will I make it?

I start to fly.
letting the wind
carry me higher
than I've ever been.

I look back
and see my cocoon.
SMALLER, Smaller, smaller
I can barely see it.

I look forward and
see the world.

I look at all that surrounds
me, and see

Submitted on 2007-11-30 09:23:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really liked this poem. I really liked the metaphor of you to a butterfly, the way you changed and have new things that you are approaching in your life.

The way that the poem was set up was.......different. Not neccesarily bad or good. It was unique and I kinda liked it personally.

I am still a budding writer and so I am not really sure if I can pick out flaws with it but I really enjoyed it and I plan on reading more of your work.

| Posted on 2007-12-08 00:00:00 | by enigmaticone | [ Reply to This ]

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