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    dots Submission Name: just give me a chancedots
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    Author: BlackBloodDrop
    ASL Info:    19/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    7.08 - 24/6/12
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsjust give me a chancedots
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    i see him coming
    i smile as he passes
    i smell his sweet breeze that carries me off into my own thoughts...
    to myself i wonder why it is he wont even try
    why he lets such opportunity's just slide
    he just continues to let the moments pass
    not letting the others get through his wall
    why doesn't he know
    why doesn't he see just cause you got hurt a couple times doesn't mean it is always going to be that way
    how do you expect to live when you just let life slide by?




    Submitted on 2007-11-30 12:23:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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