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Author: Inkybro
ASL Info:    17/M/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 55 /69 /39
Words: 35
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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About a girl I am a bit intimidated by.


Now you, little lady
Your voice
Your face
Your smile
Your gaze
Why is it that
I can't say
How I feel
I admit it
I confess
It's a little hard
To talk to you

Submitted on 2007-11-30 13:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Haha, at of all your pity-wanting poems(I admit it I've just read one) I like this one. It's short, it's cute and you get the point across without rambling. The only problem I would say would punctuation but who cares about that. Nice piece.
| Posted on 2007-11-30 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]

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